- My Grade = Criterion A - 3 / Criterion B - 3 / Criterion C - 4 / Criterion D - 2
- Teacher's comment : Although attempted to discuss relevant idea - the essay lacks cohesion. Language is weak.
- My Goal : 6 / 6 / 6 / 6
- How to Improve? : Writing a paragraph per week until I have the last essay task.
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My personal profile is ISTJ, which is also called the duty fulfiller, or inspector. ISTJs are steady, productive contributors. They are logical and methodical, and often enjoy tasks that require them to use step-by-step reasoning to solve a problem.
Because of its features, judge, lawyer, computer programmer, and doctor is appropriate careers for ISTJ. These careers usually need logic, In the summer of 2013, at the last day before I came back to Singapore, my friends planned to have a party for me. Those emo teenagers firstly took me to karaoke and paid the monet for 3 hours. The first song we sang was 'The Fox', and we became the beasts in the fancy lyrics. Someone imitated the horse, and one other guy mimiced chicken. After that, we sang in normal condition during the rest 1 hour, but it was the ready for last 30 minutes in the karaoke. We danced with the beat of 'Gangnamstyle', just shouted with a rock song, and finally we cried grisly with the rhythm of a heavy metal song under the neon sign from the twinkling light ball. After that, my friends invited me to one of my friend's house (the boy on the right picture) with fuzzled voices, and we watched an animation for supplement of stamina. After the short break for one and half hour, we started to play 'copying the amination scene'. and the best guy licked a cherry and roll in on his tongue. It sounds like 'lerolerolerolerolero......', and we admired his amazing synchronizing skills. After the harsh and energetic party, I got impressed by that gorgeous event for me, and thanked to my friends right before I came back to Singapore.
The chariot of fire uncover the blanket of night, and the tall buildings change their colors from black to white. The red rooves on the small hill are brightened and decorate the land. The buildings which were twinling with fascionative neon signs and lightings at night are shown their own appearances as matchboxes. Although it was disappeared a night, under the sun, haze is suddenly appeared, and steadily covered the city. Cars fill the quiet streets between the buildings and report the morning's sunshine with honk. People open their curtains and windows to greet the day. The opened windows reflect the shine and dazzle my eyes. The heat from the early shine gradually warm up the land and air, and trees are slowly awake and ready for photosynthesis under the shine and heat. Dilligent people already woke up and start their buzy day by take taxies and buses. The land breeze during the night was gone, and see breeze, which contains salty sea smell, blows from the ocean. Eventually the harsh sound of constriction let lazy people wake up from the comfortable beds.
Around the deep green mountains, there are scattered tall iron transmission towers which are connected with thich and long wires. Under the mountains, the white tall buildings stand right under the mountain. They have green rooves, so it can be seen as the part of the mountains. In front of the buildings, there are three campuses and three playgrounds. The left campuses has white windows based on the brown blocks, and it has smallest playground. The middle campus shows festival of colors, because it is decorated by yellow, green, brown, and red. The right campus is basically painted by light brown, but it has two thick brown rectangles and green basketball court at the right of its playground. The dark green trees surround the three campuses and sandy playgrounds, as the natural border. In front of the campuses, variable heights of small buildings are standing, and they decorate the land with colorful rooves. Between the buildings, mini cars on the grey roads run, and the grasses for kitchen garden hide the simple ground.
A. What were my goals / objectives?
B. What skills did I use / learn / develop?
C. What were the results of my efforts? I. Literature Circle a. Comments by teacher + score : It was generally good, but we were still a tendency to identify and describe. The grade is 6. b. My reaction : I recognised that in this Lit Circle, our analysing skill was not adequate to explain and discuss about the story completely, but the grade of 6 was fairly surprise. I'm really happy about my grade, and in the next quarter, I hope to improve more. II. Analytical Essay a. Comments : Very good analysis of a theme, examples and discusses provided / Clear introduction, ideas build on each other, solid conclusion / Language generally clear with an effort, to use complex sentences but errors sometimes intrude. / Well done, good analysis overall! b. Reaction : The result was obvious that I am not really good at using language, and I realise that problem since I write my last sentence. I know the solutions are reading more and more books and writing more and more. Improving language skills is definitely time-consuming task, but the result must show me development for every subjects. c. Further Reflection Q. What strategies did I use in approaching this task? What will I keep or change? What strategies will I use to improve my language? A. In this essay, I tried to express the theme 'Suffering as Entertainment' by the time before the Hunger Games, during the Hunger Games, and after the Hunger Games. By the time gone, the thoughts about the Hunger Games was changed, so I think I expressed it as much as I can, but I kept focus on the theme 'Suffering as Entertainment' so the main idea of the writing was not really changed. Also Our part of District 12, nicknamed the Seam, is usually crawling with coal miners heading out to the morning shift at this hour. Men and women with hunched shoulders, swollen knuckles, many of whom have long since stopped trying to scrub the coal dust out of their broken nails and the lines of their sunken faces. But today the black cinder streets are empty. The reaping isn't until two. May as well sleep in. If you can. (Collins, 4)
Work Cited Collins, Suzanne. The Hunger Games. London: Scholastic Ltd, 2009. Print.
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